Blossoms in Star Light

Wednesday, 16. April 2008, 05:31:40

Drops of color show
In the lawn with quiet grace
Nobel rest for butterflies

Scattered stars of night
Morning petals do smile soft
The Imagination wakes

Dream into a New DaySkipping Around Time

Comments

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By cakkleberrylane, # 16. April 2008, 13:19:19

How simple and beautiful this poem is.
In just six lines you bring to life a powerful evocation.
It is economical with words, yet chooses those that reach, rise, soar,
and then quietly rest, having done what was needed to bring the images to life.

Quite wonderful!

Drops of color show
In the lawn with quiet grace
Nobel rests for butterflies

Scattered stars of night
Morning petals do smile soft
The Imagination wakes.

Thank you for sharing this poem.

By lokutus_prime, # 16. April 2008, 15:50:30

Hi Lois! Hope today has been peaceful and fun and full of lots of smiles!

By Cynthia23, # 16. April 2008, 23:10:46

Hi, my friend, Loku! Thank you for just ... well, the kindest remark. I am flattered and very grateful for your ongoing encouragement to my piecing together of the English language in an attempt to convey how I actually feel and see the world around.

I hope also that your days are filled with smiles and warmth and happy faces also.

By Cynthia23, # 16. April 2008, 23:15:12

Noble rest for butterflies....

It'll be a while before I forget that one. Beautiful vision.

By ricewood, # 19. April 2008, 15:45:24

Thank you, Mr. Ricewood, for the harmonious smile you have given to me today.

By Cynthia23, # 19. April 2008, 16:38:15

Yes, no S, Mr. Ricewood. Thank you, really.

By Cynthia23, # 25. April 2008, 03:55:17

Great!

Well, now I know where to go when I want a lesson in poetry!

Thanks

Now I gotta go try it!

By chinajon, # 1. May 2008, 12:13:01

Oh well... I am blocked out of my blog again.
So, I am going to post my effort here.
I hope you don't mind Cynthia.

Wisps of morning clouds
Greet the borning of the day
Angel’s shadows fly away

By chinajon, # 1. May 2008, 13:35:22

Jon, you are so kind and very generous with your compliments. Thank you for this. Thank you very much!

What a lovely composition. You are always welcome to write and compose inside of my space. Thank you for wanting to do this here.

By Cynthia23, # 2. May 2008, 02:35:08

I changed the last line....

Wisps of morning clouds
Greet the borning of the day
Angel’s shadows whispering

I like it! Ha ha. Thanks for writing this style. It is fun and creative. Is it Japanese style?

Now to see if I can get into my own blog!

... a moment later ...

Yay! It worked. No, formatting, but maybe I can get that to work next time.

By chinajon, # 4. May 2008, 02:31:20

Hi Jon, I like so much more "Angel's shadows whispering." In my mind, it reminds me of the wind. Great work! Glad you were able to post inside your page yesterday. Thank you, dear Jon, for sharing these lovely "Wisps" of delight inside my pages.

Ooops … I was a bit mistaken - the sedoka is a poem of two katuata.

By Cynthia23, # 4. May 2008, 05:33:16

I sometimes follow a form as it seems to be within the words I am trying to express.

Sometimes the words just pour out and it would be a pity to try and format them.

Anyway, I had been looking at the lowering clouds on the hillsides near the campus and when I saw your poem, I used that style for my poem too.

I had written a Cinquain about it and wanted to try your style.

Thanks

Gotta go and pack up to the new week ...

By chinajon, # 4. May 2008, 07:37:33

Your Cinquain, "Drizzle," is fabulous!

By Cynthia23, # 4. May 2008, 15:23:53

Oh thank you dahrlin' I am so happy you like it!

By chinajon, # 9. May 2008, 16:16:47

happily smiling!

By Cynthia23, # 9. May 2008, 20:02:26