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I found this sentence below in the Chinese Formal Forum. A friend from U.S.A had translated it into chinese, and ask others for correcting her translation. I think the sentence is beautiful so I posted my translation.

The original:
"A tear hidden, lost and forgotten within the soul of one, becomes a cherished gift. May this gift reside in the hearts of many."

this below is my translation. please give me your opinions.

那滴心灵深处 失落的 被遗忘的泪水
变成了思念的种子
埋藏在了许多人的心中