Like Dorothy and Toto, Went Over the Rainbow, To Blow Off Auntie Em

To Being One Of Us, For Once, Instead Of A Them

Angel Tears

(this may suck, i wrote it a long time ago, so bear with me and please comment!)


this feeling, these feelings
they let my eyes see
but how can this being
of truancy be?

a single teardrop runs down yon angels face
and by fortune is wiped by the finger of grace
but still lives that sadness buried in her mind
so deep and discreet only god could find

but her prayers go unanswered,
the truth that is lost
it affected the future
a life was the cost

that this sense of lonliness could overcome hope
so everone weeps, and she leaves them to cope
now far away in a small place of peace
her untainted face, a frown to crease

as she ponders life's choices
made wrong or done right
and what went through her head
on the last lonely night

her sadness goes on, death could not destroy
it resides in us all, both girl and boy
the want of an end, the need for relief
like unto a tree with each falling leaf
(ebbing away....)

so on she cries, her tears cleanse our world
her banner of sunshine held highly, unfurled
bringing light to the others in need
now she has finally come to succeed

NaiivityOverseas (long distances)

Comments

AustinMisterSunny Sunday, December 9, 2007 1:33:08 AM

I loved the cadences in this piece. Wonderful word selection and not only did you rhyme well and creatively, but you told a story. That's what poetry is supposed to do, really. A lot of people lose track of that essential basis when they write. Also how glorious it is to read a poem that isn't plastered with repetition. Thumbs up!

JUWANA!jm081 Monday, December 10, 2007 9:22:36 PM

*cries* wow nobody's ever been that nice! thank you so much...i thought my poetry sucked!

Kill_Joy_360 Tuesday, December 11, 2007 9:19:03 PM

purdy picture, and awesome poem!

JUWANA!jm081 Tuesday, December 11, 2007 9:20:01 PM

lol thanks kill joy! it means much!

JUWANA!jm081 Friday, December 14, 2007 8:53:46 PM

OMG TRIS...I FRICKIN LOVE YOU! ITS NICE TO KNOW THAT FRIENDS KNOW HONESTY, AND ITS ALSO GREAT TO FIGURE OUT THAT I DONT SUCK QUITE AS BAD AS I THOUGHT I DID!

MORE POETRY TO COME, NOW, 4 SURE

JUWANA!jm081 Monday, December 17, 2007 4:29:12 PM

UM... WHAT U WAITING 4?

JUWANA!jm081 Monday, December 17, 2007 4:40:49 PM

wtf?

JUWANA!jm081 Monday, December 17, 2007 4:44:40 PM

LOL YESH I KNOW WHATZ U MEAN

I CAN HAS CHEEZBURGER?

LOL YA THATS ON SOMEONE'S PIC, WITH A CAT...IT WAS GREAT I LOVED IT!

BTW...WHY WASNT YOU AT THE PARTY?

Green_frog^^mangostreen Monday, December 17, 2007 4:49:58 PM

That's a wonderful poem !

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Monday, December 17, 2007 7:18:03 PM

i think secretly....you knew it was good...you just wanted to hear it from other people....

JUWANA!jm081 Monday, December 17, 2007 8:24:05 PM

OMG CAIT YOU ROX THE SOX!

UM IDK I SERIOUSLY THOUGHT IT WAS LIKE, AVERAGE, NOT ALL THAT GOOD. THEN MY FRIENDS TOLD ME TO PUT IT UP AND OTHERS LIKED IT SO NOW I THINK I REALLY DID THINK IT WAS GOOD ALL ALONG...I WAS JUST AFRAID OTHERS WOULDNT LIKE IT CUZ ALL THE PEOPLE I SHOWED IT TOO BEFORE WERE LIKE "OH YEAH W/E IT WAS OK".

LOL YA SERIOUS SELF CONFIDENCE ISSUES BUT IT DONT MATTER NOW!

JUWANA!jm081 Monday, December 17, 2007 8:24:24 PM

THANKIES MANGOSTREEN!

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Tuesday, December 18, 2007 12:00:06 AM

well count on me to tell it like it is!

mangostreen?

JUWANA!jm081 Tuesday, December 18, 2007 4:26:15 PM

WELL I CERTAINLY WOULDNT EXPECT YOU TOO LIE!

PERTY? NO CLUE WHATS GOING ON...

Green_frog^^mangostreen Tuesday, December 18, 2007 4:54:23 PM

what are you talking about? I have just read it since yesterday. I realized that 'I like it'. That all.
"IVEALWAYSBEENEVIL" do you think I'm lying?

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Tuesday, December 18, 2007 4:56:52 PM

oh..lmao...i thought that mangostreen was one of her words!! lmao.

Green_frog^^mangostreen Tuesday, December 18, 2007 5:09:34 PM

eekpbigsmile

JUWANA!jm081 Tuesday, December 18, 2007 8:42:29 PM

WOW...THIS FEELS LIKE SOME ALTERNATE REALITY...WOAH

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Tuesday, December 18, 2007 10:41:16 PM

geez...

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Tuesday, December 18, 2007 10:44:37 PM

lol nothing! i'm laughing at myself and my mangosteen missunderstanding...

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Tuesday, December 18, 2007 10:51:50 PM

lol, you don't have to apologize cuz i'm a loser...

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Tuesday, December 18, 2007 10:53:39 PM

lol...uh...if you say so...

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Tuesday, December 18, 2007 10:56:36 PM

well i'm saying ssssssssooooooooo!...muahaha...mine's bigger.

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Tuesday, December 18, 2007 11:06:24 PM

omg! your comment has a scroll bar!!! lmao.

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Tuesday, December 18, 2007 11:09:10 PM

that takes talent...lol. \m/

lol, jm is gonna come back and be like what the hell?...

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Tuesday, December 18, 2007 11:15:01 PM

lol. uh...ok? but you're here now...so you don't have to wait for l8r.

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Tuesday, December 18, 2007 11:17:54 PM

i can't help it...it's so easy!!

k, well i g2g, l8r.

JUWANA!jm081 Wednesday, December 19, 2007 4:25:11 PM

*laughs* WHAT THE HELL?

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Wednesday, December 19, 2007 7:20:46 PM

lol

JUWANA!jm081 Wednesday, December 19, 2007 8:21:06 PM

YA JUST DOIN WHATCHA EXPECT

Rippripp2002 Thursday, December 20, 2007 6:09:49 AM

tis good

devil

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Thursday, December 20, 2007 3:57:00 PM

thanx for being somewhat predictable lol. that's like a once in a lifetime thing.

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Thursday, December 20, 2007 7:28:01 PM

I think we're all a little lost sometimes...

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Friday, December 21, 2007 9:00:51 PM

mostly...

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Monday, December 24, 2007 4:41:18 PM

All right!

JUWANA!jm081 Thursday, January 3, 2008 4:31:17 PM

OMG...MY FRIENDS. GOTTA LOVE EM!

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Thursday, January 3, 2008 7:00:39 PM

well yeah...cuz if you don't....we'll kill you lol.

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Thursday, January 3, 2008 7:00:45 PM

well yeah...cuz if you don't....we'll kill you lol.

JUWANA!jm081 Friday, January 4, 2008 4:28:20 PM

UM, THANKZ, I THINK

c8linivealwaysbeenevil Friday, January 4, 2008 4:59:15 PM

well yeah.

JUWANA!jm081 Sunday, January 6, 2008 9:42:36 PM

of course

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