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Rain...

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The storm raged overhead as they faced each other in the dark alleyway, daggers drawn. In the pouring rain the two figures were almost indistinguishable, but it was apparent that one had been hunting the other.
"It's time to end your stay on this planet, Aldernak" said one rain-soaked figure. "You should have returned what was mine".
Aldernak grinned. "Yours, Sophie? I think not - I won the bet".
She spat at him. "With crooked dice!".
"They were your crooked dice!".
This time Sophie grinned back at him, showing a couple of unusually pointy teeth. "True...but I want it back all the same".
"Well then, I guess we have a problem".
They stood there a moment longer, sizing each other up for the last time. Then one leapt towards the other and they fought. Their daggers clashed again and again as they grappled, each seeking an opportunity for the killer blow.
One more time they struggled, both pushing and pulling at each other to try and keep the enemy blade away but the enemy in range. Suddenly one of them slipped on the wet ground and the other struck, piercing through the sodden clothing to the heart in a trice. The figure fell to the ground, dead. The victor looked down at the body for a moment, as if to be certain they weren't getting up, then reached down to pick up something that had been dislodged in the fight. It was...a wedding ring. Once again the figure turned to look at the body.
"We always did fight too much..."
Then it turned and walked slowly away as the rain continued to fall.

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Comments

Dark FurieFurie Wednesday, June 20, 2007 9:44:59 AM

Who won? bigeyes I could feel the rain slamming me as I read that. up

theoddbod Wednesday, June 20, 2007 10:10:30 AM

Does it matter who won?

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 10:42:08 AM

i think Aldernak got killed by a ghost... Sophie was already dead in the previous story left bigsmile






serious now... in this story, Aldernak's the one got stabbed right? leftright

Dark FurieFurie Wednesday, June 20, 2007 10:50:04 AM

It always matters who won, else britain's incomprehensible love of football wouldn't be so famous.

I reckon Sophie won it myself. The parting line seems more like a female thing to say.

I love it when action sequences get written where you can't tell who is doing what. It adds to the chaos of the situation.

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 11:01:22 AM

if we're right, then Mart didn't put the " . " in the right spot. that's the one confusing me actually left

theoddbod Wednesday, June 20, 2007 11:02:06 AM

I'm going to post a Sticky about various things - the way i use Aldernak and Sophie will have to be part of it.

A female thing, Mik? That depends on the tone you imagine it's spoken in.

theoddbod Wednesday, June 20, 2007 11:07:35 AM

What full stop in the wrong spot?

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 11:20:40 AM

"Yours, Sophie? i think not- i won the bet" She spat on him.





that... and that's not the only one. it's a bit confusing. don't you think you should put a "." in "Yours, Sophie? i think not- i won the bet." (here)


the way you put it, well... it looked like Sophie was talking to herself. ah it's difficult for me to explain... if you were here, i could just point it out. i'm just too lazy to type now faint

theoddbod Wednesday, June 20, 2007 11:34:30 AM

I sort of see what you mean. It looks a bit confusing with Opera Mini as it plays around with line returns. I'll tweak it later - currently on my to buy some foodstuffs

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 11:38:45 AM

okay... let me know when it's done. i wanna know for sure who got killed bigsmile

Hiteshahitesha Wednesday, June 20, 2007 11:46:37 AM

you know something? I think Sophie won too!!! bigeyes Wait I do have reasons backing this conclusion:

1. I agree with Mik, the tone does sound feminie and those are quite femme words to say.. but yes that still leaves space for doubt!!
2. A woman would NEVER dislodge her wedding ring!! bigeyes I repeat NEVER she either intentionally misplaces it, or guards it with her life!
3. In a fight a woman, again, NEVER looses her footing p verbal or physical the fight might be!!

I loved reading through your blog!!

Dark FurieFurie Wednesday, June 20, 2007 11:56:14 AM

Plus women are just more Evil than men. Look at Fanny for a prime example.
angel

theoddbod Wednesday, June 20, 2007 12:03:18 PM

Thanks, Hitesha! bigsmile

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 12:13:16 PM

Really, Mik? see that Mart, I'M A WOMAN yes finally... someone here believes that i'm a woman party p

Hiteshahitesha Wednesday, June 20, 2007 12:14:06 PM

well..yes women are just more intelligent to come up with devious schemes!! p

and the pleasure of reading thorugh the blog was mine happy so thank YOU

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 12:17:17 PM

oh hitesha no don't encourage him... it'll get worse faint

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 12:18:18 PM

bigsmile p

theoddbod Wednesday, June 20, 2007 12:23:13 PM

Grr...p

theoddbod Wednesday, June 20, 2007 12:30:08 PM

Incidentally, i can imagine a man saying that last sentence easily (with a sad, resigned tone). And the wedding ring might easily become dislodged if it was not on the finger in the first place...and nothing says whether it came from the winner or not.

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 12:35:34 PM

gosh... the wedding ring? scared can't we just put the focus on other thing leftright

theoddbod Wednesday, June 20, 2007 12:55:39 PM

You mean who lived and who died?

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 1:03:44 PM

aren't they both dead? leftright Sophie is a ghost and she killed Aldernak bigeyes

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 1:05:14 PM

but i'm alive... and pretty too o p

theoddbod Wednesday, June 20, 2007 1:18:34 PM

You're alive? *makes note of new story idea* devil

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 1:26:35 PM

oh Mart! it's bad enough that you doubted my sexuality irked now... you don't believe that i'm pretty too? bigeyes cry

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 1:27:40 PM

p

Dark FurieFurie Wednesday, June 20, 2007 5:09:03 PM

Where did he doubt your sexuality, Frank?

theoddbod Wednesday, June 20, 2007 5:13:50 PM

Ssh, Betsy, Frank's gone to sleep.

Dark FurieFurie Wednesday, June 20, 2007 5:56:46 PM

Betsy? lol

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 11:24:49 PM

lol Hi Betsy... nice to meet ya! lol

theoddbod Wednesday, June 20, 2007 11:32:49 PM

Ssh, Frank, I think Betsy's gone to sleep leftright

theoddmissusfunz81 Wednesday, June 20, 2007 11:33:53 PM

you fixed it bigsmile


you know what, the biggest clue about who won is this line "its true... but i want it back all the same." i'm guessing Sophie said that... and after the fight, the winner took the ring from the dead one. so Aldernak's the one who's dead. am i right?

theoddbod Wednesday, June 20, 2007 11:46:11 PM

You mean the line you just misquoted? And you're assuming the ring is the reason for the confrontation.

theoddmissusfunz81 Thursday, June 21, 2007 12:00:31 AM

okay... first of all... i just woke up, that's my excuse for the misquote thingy. and second, i thought that wedding ring issue was over last nite irked

theoddbod Thursday, June 21, 2007 12:04:50 AM

lol Good morning!

theoddmissusfunz81 Thursday, June 21, 2007 12:05:12 AM

is it that hard to say that i was right? irked




Grrr... *pokes Mart* p

theoddbod Thursday, June 21, 2007 12:06:46 AM

Ow! Not again!

Hiteshahitesha Thursday, June 21, 2007 5:33:37 AM

wedding rings are ALWAYS an issue!! bigeyes first you want them, then you cant wait to lose them, but wait!! They're still jwellery!! So you want them back!! [ok from a female's point of view]

So.. It HAS to be Sophie who's won!!.. or wait it could be Aldernak. [Ok this story has really caught on to me so was pondering over it all night.. bigeyes dont believe I did that!]

So if we look at it this way, it was actuall Aldernak's ring which Sophie was holding and dislodged it in the fight. And men d ohave this habit of gloating even the tiniest of victory - seen in that light -

"We always did fight too much..."

sounds like - "did we really need to fight? It was obvious I would win always!" kind of statements!!

And this is one looooooong comment so dont throw me out pleeeeeeeeez sad

Dark FurieFurie Thursday, June 21, 2007 7:42:32 AM

That's if the ring was the reason for the fight. If they're married then it could easily be a fight over the last after eight.

Hiteshahitesha Thursday, June 21, 2007 7:55:09 AM

its still a fight for the rings...!! angel

theoddbod Thursday, June 21, 2007 10:28:05 AM

lol

theoddbod Thursday, June 21, 2007 10:35:09 AM

Don't worry, nobody's getting thrown out.
I love how you've obviously all got different pictures in your heads. And all of them different to mine.

Dark FurieFurie Thursday, June 21, 2007 1:07:25 PM

I've just read it again. Now I'm seeing a married couple arguing over a property card in Monopoly.
bigsmile

Dark FurieFurie Thursday, June 21, 2007 1:13:07 PM

Whatever was won or lost in the bet wasn't a wedding ring. They wouldn't bet their rings to each other.

Sophie's out to get back what Aldernak won, but the victor only picked up the wedding ring.

So, Aldernak must have won, cause if Sophie did she'd have searched the body for her prize.

theoddmissusfunz81 Thursday, June 21, 2007 1:23:07 PM

leftright thank God i'm still single then bigeyes

theoddbod Thursday, June 21, 2007 1:37:25 PM

That was careless of me - i didn't intend there to be a plausible winner. The only arguments i currently have against Mik's reasoning are tenuous ones. irked

theoddmissusfunz81 Thursday, June 21, 2007 1:42:41 PM

flooder p

theoddbod Thursday, June 21, 2007 1:46:20 PM

Opera Mini decided to act up for a few minutes irked

theoddmissusfunz81 Thursday, June 21, 2007 1:51:26 PM

not on me whistle

Dark FurieFurie Thursday, June 21, 2007 9:06:58 PM

That's cause you're one of the server monkeys that causes the problems Fan.

Mart, if you set up a shrine to the server monkeys on your page, they'll behave a bit more. I did on my sticky and now they only play up everyday.

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