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Rain...

Tuesday, 19. June 2007, 22:53:34

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The storm raged overhead as they faced each other in the dark alleyway, daggers drawn. In the pouring rain the two figures were almost indistinguishable, but it was apparent that one had been hunting the other.
"It's time to end your stay on this planet, Aldernak" said one rain-soaked figure. "You should have returned what was mine".
Aldernak grinned. "Yours, Sophie? I think not - I won the bet".
She spat at him. "With crooked dice!".
"They were your crooked dice!".
This time Sophie grinned back at him, showing a couple of unusually pointy teeth. "True...but I want it back all the same".
"Well then, I guess we have a problem".
They stood there a moment longer, sizing each other up for the last time. Then one leapt towards the other and they fought. Their daggers clashed again and again as they grappled, each seeking an opportunity for the killer blow.
One more time they struggled, both pushing and pulling at each other to try and keep the enemy blade away but the enemy in range. Suddenly one of them slipped on the wet ground and the other struck, piercing through the sodden clothing to the heart in a trice. The figure fell to the ground, dead. The victor looked down at the body for a moment, as if to be certain they weren't getting up, then reached down to pick up something that had been dislodged in the fight. It was...a wedding ring. Once again the figure turned to look at the body.
"We always did fight too much..."
Then it turned and walked slowly away as the rain continued to fall.

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Mik Furie 20. June 2007, 09:44

Who won? :eyes: I could feel the rain slamming me as I read that. :up:

Mart 20. June 2007, 10:10

Does it matter who won?

Fanny 20. June 2007, 10:42

i think Aldernak got killed by a ghost... Sophie was already dead in the previous story :left: :D






serious now... in this story, Aldernak's the one got stabbed right? :left::right:

Mik Furie 20. June 2007, 10:50

It always matters who won, else britain's incomprehensible love of football wouldn't be so famous.

I reckon Sophie won it myself. The parting line seems more like a female thing to say.

I love it when action sequences get written where you can't tell who is doing what. It adds to the chaos of the situation.

Fanny 20. June 2007, 11:01

if we're right, then Mart didn't put the " . " in the right spot. that's the one confusing me actually :left:

Mart 20. June 2007, 11:02

I'm going to post a Sticky about various things - the way i use Aldernak and Sophie will have to be part of it.

A female thing, Mik? That depends on the tone you imagine it's spoken in.

Mart 20. June 2007, 11:07

What full stop in the wrong spot?

Fanny 20. June 2007, 11:20

"Yours, Sophie? i think not- i won the bet" She spat on him.





that... and that's not the only one. it's a bit confusing. don't you think you should put a "." in "Yours, Sophie? i think not- i won the bet." (here)


the way you put it, well... it looked like Sophie was talking to herself. ah it's difficult for me to explain... if you were here, i could just point it out. i'm just too lazy to type now :faint:

Mart 20. June 2007, 11:34

I sort of see what you mean. It looks a bit confusing with Opera Mini as it plays around with line returns. I'll tweak it later - currently on my to buy some foodstuffs

Fanny 20. June 2007, 11:38

okay... let me know when it's done. i wanna know for sure who got killed :D

Hitesha 20. June 2007, 11:46

you know something? I think Sophie won too!!! :eyes: Wait I do have reasons backing this conclusion:

1. I agree with Mik, the tone does sound feminie and those are quite femme words to say.. but yes that still leaves space for doubt!!
2. A woman would NEVER dislodge her wedding ring!! :eyes: I repeat NEVER she either intentionally misplaces it, or guards it with her life!
3. In a fight a woman, again, NEVER looses her footing P: verbal or physical the fight might be!!

I loved reading through your blog!!

Mik Furie 20. June 2007, 11:56

Plus women are just more Evil than men. Look at Fanny for a prime example.
:angel:

Mart 20. June 2007, 12:03

Thanks, Hitesha! :D

Fanny 20. June 2007, 12:13

Really, Mik? see that Mart, I'M A WOMAN :yes: finally... someone here believes that i'm a woman :hat: p:

Hitesha 20. June 2007, 12:14

well..yes women are just more intelligent to come up with devious schemes!! P:

and the pleasure of reading thorugh the blog was mine :happy: so thank YOU

Fanny 20. June 2007, 12:17

oh hitesha :no: don't encourage him... it'll get worse :faint:

Fanny 20. June 2007, 12:18

:D p:

Mart 20. June 2007, 12:23

Grr...p:

Mart 20. June 2007, 12:30

Incidentally, i can imagine a man saying that last sentence easily (with a sad, resigned tone). And the wedding ring might easily become dislodged if it was not on the finger in the first place...and nothing says whether it came from the winner or not.

Fanny 20. June 2007, 12:35

gosh... the wedding ring? :insane: can't we just put the focus on other thing :left::right:

Mart 20. June 2007, 12:55

You mean who lived and who died?

Fanny 20. June 2007, 13:03

aren't they both dead? :left::right: Sophie is a ghost and she killed Aldernak :eyes:

Fanny 20. June 2007, 13:05

but i'm alive... and pretty too :o: p:

Mart 20. June 2007, 13:18

You're alive? *makes note of new story idea* :devil:

Fanny 20. June 2007, 13:26

oh Mart! it's bad enough that you doubted my sexuality :irked: now... you don't believe that i'm pretty too? :eyes: :cry:

Fanny 20. June 2007, 13:27

p:

Mik Furie 20. June 2007, 17:09

Where did he doubt your sexuality, Frank?

Mart 20. June 2007, 17:13

Ssh, Betsy, Frank's gone to sleep.

Mik Furie 20. June 2007, 17:56

Betsy? :lol:

Fanny 20. June 2007, 23:24

:lol: Hi Betsy... nice to meet ya! :lol:

Mart 20. June 2007, 23:32

Ssh, Frank, I think Betsy's gone to sleep :left::right:

Fanny 20. June 2007, 23:33

you fixed it :D


you know what, the biggest clue about who won is this line "its true... but i want it back all the same." i'm guessing Sophie said that... and after the fight, the winner took the ring from the dead one. so Aldernak's the one who's dead. am i right?

Mart 20. June 2007, 23:46

You mean the line you just misquoted? And you're assuming the ring is the reason for the confrontation.

Fanny 21. June 2007, 00:00

okay... first of all... i just woke up, that's my excuse for the misquote thingy. and second, i thought that wedding ring issue was over last nite :irked:

Mart 21. June 2007, 00:04

:lol: Good morning!

Fanny 21. June 2007, 00:05

is it that hard to say that i was right? :irked:




Grrr... *pokes Mart* p:

Mart 21. June 2007, 00:06

Ow! Not again!

Hitesha 21. June 2007, 05:33

wedding rings are ALWAYS an issue!! :eyes: first you want them, then you cant wait to lose them, but wait!! They're still jwellery!! So you want them back!! [ok from a female's point of view]

So.. It HAS to be Sophie who's won!!.. or wait it could be Aldernak. [Ok this story has really caught on to me so was pondering over it all night.. :eyes: dont believe I did that!]

So if we look at it this way, it was actuall Aldernak's ring which Sophie was holding and dislodged it in the fight. And men d ohave this habit of gloating even the tiniest of victory - seen in that light -

"We always did fight too much..."

sounds like - "did we really need to fight? It was obvious I would win always!" kind of statements!!

And this is one looooooong comment so dont throw me out pleeeeeeeeez :frown:

Mik Furie 21. June 2007, 07:42

That's if the ring was the reason for the fight. If they're married then it could easily be a fight over the last after eight.

Hitesha 21. June 2007, 07:55

its still a fight for the rings...!! :angel:

Mart 21. June 2007, 10:28

:lol:

Mart 21. June 2007, 10:35

Don't worry, nobody's getting thrown out.
I love how you've obviously all got different pictures in your heads. And all of them different to mine.

Mik Furie 21. June 2007, 13:07

I've just read it again. Now I'm seeing a married couple arguing over a property card in Monopoly.
:D

Mik Furie 21. June 2007, 13:13

Whatever was won or lost in the bet wasn't a wedding ring. They wouldn't bet their rings to each other.

Sophie's out to get back what Aldernak won, but the victor only picked up the wedding ring.

So, Aldernak must have won, cause if Sophie did she'd have searched the body for her prize.

Fanny 21. June 2007, 13:23

:left::right: thank God i'm still single then :eyes:

Mart 21. June 2007, 13:37

That was careless of me - i didn't intend there to be a plausible winner. The only arguments i currently have against Mik's reasoning are tenuous ones. :irked:

Fanny 21. June 2007, 13:42

flooder p:

Mart 21. June 2007, 13:46

Opera Mini decided to act up for a few minutes :irked:

Fanny 21. June 2007, 13:51

not on me :whistle:

Mik Furie 21. June 2007, 21:06

That's cause you're one of the server monkeys that causes the problems Fan.

Mart, if you set up a shrine to the server monkeys on your page, they'll behave a bit more. I did on my sticky and now they only play up everyday.

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