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Squashed

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The train pulled into the station, and the usual rush for the doors began. A hundred people trying to squash into a carriage made for fifty, not helped by the usual lazy sods who preferred to take their bike two stops rather than ride it two miles.
Aldernak pushed desperately between the platform zombies, made a dash for it, and succeeded in squeezing onto the train at the cost of only a grazed hand. There wasn't much room to move afterwards, squashed awkwardly against the doors with his butt pressed against something he preferred not to think about. But at least this time he wasn't nose-to-underarm with someone, and it beat the hell out of the time he'd spent the whole journey trying not to stumble face-first into giant man-boobs.
Suddenly the lights went out and the train stopped. The carriage filled with an annoyed nervous silence - people fidgeted, a child cried.
In the unexpected darkness Aldernak found himself staring through the window into a pair of sulphurous eyes. As others appeared around the carriage, there was a collective gasp from the passengers.
Then there was a sudden wrenching of metal, and somebody screamed.
They weren't the last...

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Comments

Javaen 20. March 2009, 22:00

Oooh....!

"Ask, and ye shall receive". :happy:

Only a hand scrape? :frown: Sounds treacherous! And the uncomfortable standing my pits or man boobs... :lol:

Good news, the traffic on the train will be somewhat lighter tomorrow! :yes:

Phantom2 20. March 2009, 22:26

I always wondered what Margaret Thatcher was up to these days.

clean 20. March 2009, 23:07

Yay! New story! Is it part one, or is it left to our imaginations? :eek:

theoddbod 20. March 2009, 23:32

It might be a Part One of something :sherlock:

rose-marie 21. March 2009, 12:36

Is this inspired by commuting? p:

angel292005 21. March 2009, 13:52

..worse fear

theoddbod 21. March 2009, 16:11

I did start writing this while waiting for a train yesterday...:left:

Dacotah 21. March 2009, 17:38

I like this story. :up:
By the tags: tunnel, darkness, story, series
I'd say it's a Part One of something. :D
Looking forward to the others. :smile:

Cois 21. March 2009, 21:41

Now I know what sardines would think :left: if they were still alive in the tin Homer: Doh!

flamingo-rinse 22. March 2009, 07:50

Reminds me of Charing Cross <shudder>

Zaphira 22. March 2009, 16:07

Only a person who rides the train regularly could come up with this:

at least this time he wasn't nose-to-underarm with someone,



Very descriptive indeed! :D

Cois 22. March 2009, 20:58

Charing Cross?

flamingo-rinse 22. March 2009, 21:03

...through which I used to travel, twice each day : Charing Cross railway Station

<smiles, happy in the knowledge that he never has to go there again if he doesn't want to>

theoddbod 22. March 2009, 22:33

My train isn't actually that bad most of the year...but every once in a while, it's sardine time :insane:. And I'm not in London - my one experience with the Underground was more than enough :ko:

flamingo-rinse 22. March 2009, 23:49

I used to travel from Charing X to here, and then later (& for the last few years of my previous life in UK) from London Bridge to Sydenham. Often hellish in the rush hour, especially when train(s) were cancelled. Don't miss it at all :smile:

theoddbod 23. March 2009, 00:05

I don't think anyone could possibly miss a daily commute in London - even spending a week there was enough for me.
It's bad enough walking around strange places like this :

Javaen 23. March 2009, 00:20

:insane: I hear ya there!

Zaphira 23. March 2009, 05:15

That looks like a missile! :insane:

theoddbod 23. March 2009, 20:57

That is the famous London Gherkin, also known as the Cigar :rolleyes:

flamingo-rinse 23. March 2009, 21:04

30 St Mary Axe. What kind of an address is that, I ask ya!!!

LebMAT 5. April 2009, 17:29

I also travel to work in a mini bus taxi meant for 15 people, but sometimes we would be as many as 20

Dacotah 22. April 2009, 11:25

MISSSSSSSING you and Fanny. :frown: :cry:

Javaen 22. April 2009, 12:55

*Does too, but understands... *

:D. Happy for you. Mart!

Dacotah 22. April 2009, 17:23

Understands what Jen?
:smile:

Javaen 23. April 2009, 03:18

Ah, just understanding why he is not around.

Dacotah 23. April 2009, 03:42

May I know why he isn't around?
:smile:

theoddbod 23. April 2009, 07:05

It's all a riddle wrapped inside a puzzle and disguised as a limerick p:

Dacotah 23. April 2009, 07:07

:D

Javaen 23. April 2009, 09:07

:worried: I can't see a limerick....

awww

flamingo-rinse 23. April 2009, 09:21

Hey Mart :D Nice to see you around, old chap :up: are you talking about one of those really interesting devices that musicians use - a Conun Drum??

Dacotah 23. April 2009, 12:29

Jen, he just said the word, didn't give a limerick.
:smile:

Javaen 23. April 2009, 12:55

I saw Carol. I'm not communicating very well I guess.

Dacotah 23. April 2009, 16:12

Oops, just saw you worried and awww and didn't want you to be.
:smile:

Javaen 23. April 2009, 16:20

Awww. Thanks, Carol, that's so sweet! :happy:

Dacotah 23. April 2009, 16:25

You are welcome. :happy:
Now will you say why Mart isn't around? :D

theoddbod 23. April 2009, 17:23

At the risk of sticking a pin in the grinning bubble, say it publicly and get blocked and comments deleted. I dislike gossip about me - never had any patience for it. Sorry. None of you have the whole picture (including Jen's source), and i'm not sharing just yet. Still too busy to be here much awww

Javaen 23. April 2009, 17:29

Mart, I know nothing. Heard nothing.

I just know what you've said.... And the rest has been left in my imagination. And I understand only the being happy.... Very happy part.

I never claimed to know a thing. And I hope you aren't upset.

Zaphira 23. April 2009, 17:41

I understand why you dislike gossip, and I haven't seen any gossip about you either. You can't blame people for wondering what you're doing though. I mean, we care for our friends, that's what it's about. :smile:

Phantom2 23. April 2009, 17:46

X2

Dacotah 23. April 2009, 18:14

Mart, I was joking around with Jen when she said she understood why you were not around. The :smile: and the :D was so she didn't think I was mad at her asking a question.
None of my business why, if you want to tell us you will if you don't you won't.
We all miss having you around.
Sorry if it sounded like gossip.

Dacotah 23. April 2009, 18:27

Sorry you are still so busy to be around much.

theoddbod 23. April 2009, 20:47

It's ok, I know none of you meant any harm. It was just giving me uncomfortable flashbacks to my schooldays, perhaps.

Dacotah 23. April 2009, 20:55

I'm sorry.

Javaen 23. April 2009, 21:14

*breathes sigh of relief*

:happy:

Furie 24. April 2009, 09:03

Will the comments get deleted even if we insinuate that you've been auditioning for the lead role in the British version of Fresh Prince of Bel Air? :left:

Dacotah 24. April 2009, 09:35

Or if someone :lol: at that comment?
:lol:

theoddbod 24. April 2009, 14:41

It depends if you admit that you won the role of Carlton :right:. And i'm suddenly imagining Cois as Big Uncle Phil p:

Furie 24. April 2009, 14:50

Oh my god we should so do that.
*does the Tom Jones dance*

Cois 24. April 2009, 18:48

How the hell can I be big Uncle Phil? :lol: that guy can eat me! :insane:

Furie 24. April 2009, 20:38

We got you stilts and a sumo suit. :up:

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